I've been writing Shenny smut

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Hi
I'm new to these boards, so have probably messed my board etiquette up - any pointers/feedback are appreciated

but I've been writing some Shenny kinky smut and thought I'd share;
https://www.fanfiction.net/~delgardo 

(not found how to change my username yet)
Delgardo

By the pic of the person with a pencil should be text that says "User CP". That's your user control panel and allows you to make an edits you think necessary to your profile. There's also a book with a question mark for the cover by the "Help" text in the upper right, should you have any other questions. If they're not answered there though, obviously, ask one of the more experience users in the site. I've only been here for about 2 days now.

As for your fic, I assume you mean the Dom/Sub fic, "Specialization is for insects"? Can't say I imagine Penny as a sub or Sheldon as a dom. To me, if they were to ever have sex, at the first few times, Penny would take the lead and show Sheldon how sex works and what she likes and what he may like and discover that from there. After Sheldon has learned all he can, I'd see them struggle for dominance in sex kinda like how they argue and banter, but I wouldn't see them fall into a Dom/Sub role. *Checks chapters* Sweet baby Jesus, 92?! *Checks Chapter 1* Well, that explains the 92 chapters. They're not exactly long, especially compared to some of the stuff I'm reading now(I've come such a long way).

Chapter 1: *Sees Penny awake mid morning on a Saturday* *SOD BROKEN* /Joking

Well, first impression upon opening and reading the very first chapter, you have some grammar/spelling issues. For example, the part where she thinks 'ah well, she thought, here comes the crazy' has no quotes or special way to denote that she's thinking so at first I thought it was a run-on sentence. Should be written as "Ah well," she thought. "Here comes the crazy." I also noticed a few lack of proper capitalizations (and a few unnecessary capitalizations here and there) at the beginning of sentences and periods at the end of them(And yes, even one word responses need periods at the end of them). It's weird, sometimes you do them properly, and then other times, in the very next sentence even, you seem to forget or drop them entirely. You also seem to intersperse your dialogue with stuff like Sheldon tapping his board in the middle of a sentence. While the added detail is nice, you could've simply added that at the end of the sentences/paragraph where he was speaking, rather than split it up, "dialogue" *action done here* "dialogue". Makes it a little clunky to read. I did genuinely laugh at the whole door sequence though. Very surprised that Penny just agreed to help him. Now, I don't know what season this was based in, but in the early seasons, I know Penny would've tried to get /something/ out of Sheldon for helping him even if she totally would, just to push the limit/fuel her shoes addiction.

Chapter 2: The little paintball scene was fun to read, albeit short. Same problems as the first chapter with the dialogue, grammar and spelling issues. Big problem is, is that this is supposed to be a /story/. You're kind of missing out on the stuff that links things from chapter to chapter. I mean, in chapter 1, you /did/ have Sheldon ask Penny to go paintballing with him, but you completely left out how they got there, the fact that Leonard(And I assume Raj and Howard since those two weren't even mentioned by name in the chapter) came, didn't even set up how the teams were arranged, where the paintball place was(Though the barn being the base was a nice touch, even though I don't know of any actual paintball places with barns. But at least it gave an indication that it was an outdoor paintball place.), if there were others there, what the weather that day was like, etc... However, I do acknowledge and like the first breadcrumb/hint of his "Dom" tendencies in this story with the whole "Sir" bit.

Chapter 3: So we skip yet another bunch of background stuff that links from chapter to chapter. I'm starting to think this maybe should've been labelled "vignettes leading to eventual Dom/Sub" instead of a story leading to said Dom/Sub stuff. Anyways, we jump right in to immediately buying a new suit. Not even given an explanation why he's getting a suit(Though I have my suspicions... The Pants Alternative episode comes to mind, though it would've been nice to have in-story confirmation. And if each chapter is based upon a canon episode, well it's been /quite/ some time since I've rewatched the show and haven't really seen many episodes past 4, sorry.). More of the same issues. Oooh, another breadcrumb and a nice allusion to the time when Sheldon tried to train Penny with chocolates(Incidentally, that episode wouldn't happen to be why you thought this up, would it?). Good girls get rewards, indeed.